谢振礼写托福作文【26】工作可除三害 Besides money, why do people work?

TOEFL Essay:
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By Mr. Jeenn Lee Hsieh

写作实战，新手上阵，有招胜无招。老手上阵，身经百战，无招胜有招。雅思写作最少250英文字，托福300字的应试短文，说难不难，说容易不容易。也够烦。要不是应急，写作之事，大可从长计议。既是应急，可用基本招式，进则得胜，退而不败。

招式人人会，好招不在多。举一例，仅供新手参考。招名称圆形18句，为三六六三起承转合的四段布局。起与合两段前呼后应。承与转中体两段，平行对立。短文从哪里开始，也从哪里结尾，完成绕一圈360度的圆形。

此招的玄机在起段勉强自己把主题缩小到中心焦点，再把焦点分为两个要点，分头摆在承段与转段作为要点句。最后是合段，内容与起段类似，稍微改几个字而已，所以可以预先写，方法是反向还原。两个要点再度合为一个中心焦点，再度扩大焦点为原来的主题。其实四段式写作就如同做汉堡，两片圆形面包中间夹菜夹肉。

TOEFL Topic
Test of Written English

People work because they need money to live. In your opinion, what are other reasons that people work?

工作除三害。
Work spares people from need, vice, boredom.

Example writing
by Mr. Jeenn Lee Hsieh

起三句。申论主题。集中焦点。一分为二。

Working people are supposed to be largely happy people because having a job means more than being able to just make ends meet. Money is by far the most important motivational factor that people work. In a more positive context in real life, having a career may get rid of poverty and may as well spare people from two other evils: vice and boredom.

承六句。要点一句。加五句写理由例证细节，支持主题。

Doing something worth doing helps hold boredom at bay and enjoy deserved rest after work. People who do not actually work probably do not really appreciate rest, either. As an unnecessary evil, boredom is like the feeling that nothing is important and everything is a waste of time. Ironically, those who seek rest find boredom while those who seek work find rest. For that matter, one must choose in life begween work and boredom. Since there is no excuse to be bored, one must work.

转六句。要点一句。加五句写理由例证细节，支持主题。

Vice happens to be an evil next door to boredom because of its apparent association with idleness. In fact, ever so often idleness is the beginning of plenty of vice. It can be seen that people who need money to live but refuse to work inevitably fall easy victims to such habits as heavy drinking, drug abuse, and what not. Once affected by dangerous vice, people are likely to get trouble with the law. The presence of vice, in many cases, is linked to the absence of work. Chances are that crime rates match jobless rates.

合三句。二合为一。焦点还原。重申主题。

Boredom and vice along with poverty are certainly not welcome in a happy and healthy life. The advantages of being busy with a job should hence not be limied to economic gains. After all, what a better reason to work than simply the pursuit of happiness?

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