谢振礼写托福作文【24】圆形作文-谈音乐

TOEFL Essay: 圆形作文-谈音乐
by Mr. Jeenn Lee Hsieh
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TOEFL 实例中文解说
Test of Written English

People listen to music for different reasons at different times. Why is music important to many people? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

谢振礼讲解托福真题作文

圆形作文不是新玩意。绕圈子的雕虫小技，其实是最死板的基本模板。游戏规则可用中国人传统的起承转合，360度绕圆圈。起头而接头而转头而回头。怎么起头，就怎么结尾回头。所以第一段和最后一段，一定要前呼后应。

起。前呼的基本动作是申论主题。把主题从宽变细，由大而小，聚集成一个中心焦点。在这篇谈音乐的短文，题目太大。需要逐渐缩小。音乐》主题是音乐对大家都很重要》焦点缩小到音乐所以重要是因为喜悦人心》再把焦点分两道，音乐所以让人喜悦时具有真与美的特性。第二段和第三段中体，话分两头，两头对比，头头是道。

Far far from noise, good music pleases all kinds of people and speaks all languages. Although there are times when silence is more welcome than sound, human hearts are forever charmed by the rhymes and melodies of music. Yet, of what magic stuff is music composed to be so enjoyable? Such magic power must be embodied with qualities of truth and beauty. In fact, after silence what comes nearest to expressing the inexpressible is music.

承。接头第二段。只要针对一道次焦点--真--支持主题。提出原因，例证，细节。言之有物，言之有理。

Music reveals truth. In many cultures, music is the language of truth and an essential part of life. Words can lie. Music doesn't. The truth of music sticks to memory. Indeed, great music penetrates the ear with facility and leaves the memory with difficulty. That's probably why a good song outlives all sermons. At its best, music can prevail as a higher revealation than wisdom since people do not need any brains to music. Also, in many cultural activities like dancing, music plays an indispensable role. The true spirit of dancing goes with music. Dancers would look insane when music is not heard. In short, music is true to life.

转。转头第三段。只要针对另一道次焦点--美--支持主题。再提原因，例证，细节。言之有物，言之有理。

Much as painting, music creates beauty. Musicians paint their pictures on silence just as a master painter does on canvas. The sound of music is heart's delight No other medium is like music in demostrating that kind of beauty which cannot be said and on which it is impossible to be silent. It's so much akin to love that there are more love songs than anything else. It may be because love is beautiful with all its foolishness. And it seems anything too stupid or too beautiful to be spoken is sung. In the words of William Shakespeare: "If music be the food of love; play on." How beautiful it is love in music!

合。第四段是回头段。基本动作恰好与第一段相反。由细而宽。先综合中体第二和第三段的两个次焦点，真和美。二而合为一。中心焦点还原成主题。重申主题。绕到这里结尾，刚好写了一圈。

Beauty interterwines with truth in music to become a joy of life. One does not have to fully understand what is true and beautiful to appreciate the sound of music. People enjoy music at different times for different reasons. But what can be a better reason to listen to music than just digesting time? Should anybody fail to like music or silence, try noise!

简而言之。第一段与最后一段，前呼后应。中间两段，内容对比。起承转合，绕圆圈而不离焦点。圆形作文的妙处是能使主题有焦点，结构有组织，内容有支持。

圆形作文倾向死板，但不是呆板。我们练习作文，尽量绕圆而不超越范围。敢写不怕错，错了不为过。共勉之。

踏在圆形的死板上，心图已有。其他的工作就是怎么用英文写了。

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